I lick the lies from your smile
Lips retreating into a bated
Silence, eyes migrating, aloof
The Devil puts on his coat, it’s
Winter now, the day I thought
Would never come, the final
Farewell of a promised love
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I lick the lies from your smile
Lips retreating into a bated
Silence, eyes migrating, aloof
The Devil puts on his coat, it’s
Winter now, the day I thought
Would never come, the final
Farewell of a promised love
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A few words but deep meaning
Thank you so much Vandana =)
Dear MLM,
I can see Kim’s post influenced this poem right from the first line. I wish I could do this…
Awww thank you so much your poem was so beautiful =)
Loved the way you expressed this. “The devil puts on his coat” – WOW! So hard when love departs and puts such a chill in the air.
Thank you so much Mary =) It really does
I agree with Mary. Poignant.
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Profound and expertly succinct.
Thank you Nicole =)
wow, you nailed this in so few words! I think, “eyes migrating, aloof” really hit me. So sad how we can become strangers so quickly. Great job!
It is heart-breaking how that happens that is the worst part to me
A lovers dissapearance is a sad time…
tough to deal with, internally. Let alone, trying to wrap ones head around the circumstances that lead to such disapearance.
It is indeed. Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment =)
Those are the moments that define us for some time (unfortunately, in MY case, it defined me for FAR too long).
I get stuck too, I believe love and friendship is a forever kind of arrangement but others don’t share my view
LOL….they SHOULD be.
I’m going through this with a couple people right now.
Purging the toxic…or the useless…can be therapeutic, but also sad, watching them live on in the distance.
I will go one believing they are and giving of myself even if I get hurt because it is worth it but damn it hurts!!
I am sorry to hear it, I like to say when their toxic that you will feel fantastic afterwards but it isn’t that easy I feel guilt about relationships ending no matter how unhealthy, I know it was the right chose but guilt is very stubborn. You still miss certain things but on the rare occasions I have ended something it has been the right choice, the only choice for my continued survival
Sometimes it is put upon us to declare ourselves free from emotional servitude and you express this so very well, concisely, with hesitant conviction! Wow, great write!
Thank you very much Scott, concise has always been a challenge for me (I am verbose naturally) it is why I took up haiku and why I enjoy working with short poems trying to pack as much in as few lines as possible
Your first line pulled me in, made me grin and nod in knowing. Like your economy of word and phrase. You pack a healthy punch full of earned wisdom.
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/
Thank you so much Elizabeth =)
I like the verse and the nicely placed symbolism as well
you done Kim proud
Thank you kindly!
Your poetic skill is marvellous. I was hooked by the power of the first line!!!
Eileen
That is so sweet thank you =)
IIt may be sad, but it’s also beautiful.
Awww thank you Rosemary =)
The poem made me feel chilly and I guess it was meant too – so very nicely done. I love the imagery particularly the devil putting on a coat.
Thank you so much! It was indeed